Dyran's Misfortune: Chapter 7

Listening to: LOTR: ROTK
Feeling: lovely
Any errors let me know and I'll try and fix them. ~~~~~~~ “Drop him, Mr. Roger,” snarled Jack. “But…” “Our agreement was to capture the boy, and kill the cop, then when we were done with his services you could have him. Until then, Mr. Roger, keep your hands off of him.” Mr. Roger snarled slightly, and then replied, “Fine. As you wish, Jack,” releasing Dyran’s throat. Dyran slumped down the bars, his knees buckling up to hit his chest. Dyran rolled to the side and coughed as Mr. Roger glared down at him. As Mr. Roger started to walk away Dyran muttered something under his breath; Mr. Roger snapped around and stomped back towards Dyran. He grabbed the front of Dyran’s shirt and jerked him up. “What?” “You heard me.” As Mr. Roger brought back his fist, Jack grabbed his arm. “No,” Jack snarled, pulling Mr. Roger’s arm down. “Derek, go upstairs, now!” Mr. Derek Roger grunted at him, but released Dyran and proceeded to walk away. Jack then grabbed Dyran’s hair, pulling him up he opened the cell door and threw him in. Dyran rolled backwards and landed on his back near the middle of the cell as Jack slammed the cell door. Dyran awoke the next morning to Marianna shaking him. “Get up. It’s time for a shower.” As he rolled over, she tossed a pair of swim trunks at him. “Wear these.” Dyran’s eyes then focused on her for the first time since yesterday; she was wearing a tight black and red bikini. “Well, come on. I’m only showing you where the showers are once.” Dyran scampered to his feet and changed quickly as Marianna turned and waited for him. As Marianna rinsed off her hair, she turned to Dyran. She filled her mouth with water, stepped a bit closer towards him and spit. He turned to glare at her as she smiled and allowed the hot water to roll down her reddening cheeks. Dyran filled his mouth with water as Marianna turned her back to him and spit it at her. She snapped around and glared daggers at him as she turned her water off. Dyran proceeded to copy her and followed her. As they both grabbed a towel; Dyran dried off his face, hung the towel around his neck and wrapped is arms gently around Marianna’s shoulders and waist. He then planted a light kiss on her neck as she lightly stroked his hand. Jack’s footsteps pounded down the stone hallways towards Dyran and Marianna’s cell. His face was wretched with anger at the fact that his breakfast hadn’t been served to him yet. As he stepped around the corner, his eyes locked on the image of Marianna wrapped in Dyran’s arms. His face reddened at the sight as he rushed to the cell door. The cell door crashed on the side bars, at the force with which Jack had flung it open. Dyran and Marianna jolted awake. Marianna stumbled from the bed, landing on her side as Jack stepped forward. Marianna rolled away, frightened, as Dyran tried to jump out of Jacks way. But Jack grabbed Dyran’s throat, pushing him back to the bed. Marianna scrambled to her feet as Jack pulled up his second hand, preparing to punch Dyran. “No,” she yelled, grabbing his arm, trying to stop him from swinging. “Jay!” Jack tried to throw her off as she yelled for Jay. Dyran’s grip loosened as his air was depleted. As Jack had finally thrown Marianna off, Jay charged in and pulled Jack off of Dyran. “Hey-hey, stop,” Jay yelled at Jack, grabbing Jacks shoulder as Jack gripped Jay’s shirt-collar tightly. Marianna grabbed Dyran as he rolled out of the bed. His throat was red, Marianna held him while Jay tried to control Jack. “Hey, I don’t want to hear it,” he snapped as Jack tried to argue with him. Jack pulled Jays hands from his and glared at Marianna and Dyran. Then turning swiftly on his heel, he marched away, slamming the cell door against the bars and not looking back. ~~~~~~~~~~~ A/N: I'm not sure what I'm going to do after this... truly I might end it for awhile, and pick it back up in a few months or possibly next year, unless someone can help me decide what should happen next. Jess, Trish, my friends... it'd be really nice if you could help me here girls. A/N: Thank you to everyone that's commented on my story and given me some good ideas for my story. Jess, Armand, Sabe, Lilbit... thank you girls so much. It will take me awhile to get my drive going to actually work on the story, but as soon as it's done I'll let you all know. Thank you, luv ya girls.
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i like tigers
[Anonymous]
goodness...you sure have backed yourself into a nice little corner, haven't ya? let's see...since when do dryan and marianna share a cell? when you say jack stomped toward their cell it implys it...and how did they get back to the cell? they were in the shower! i think a good i dea would be to cut back to xavier right here. put what he's doing to try and find dryan..try and add in some comic relief. dont know what else to say. good luck!
LiLBiT
hey ash! sry i didn't e-mail u back while i was at camp, we don't have access to computers, so we can only recieve mail. but as far as your story goes
[Anonymous]
i agree w/ lilbit, you should switch back to xavier for now. it could be cool if marianna got switched to another place so she couldn't be w/ dyran,
[Anonymous]
but i really don't know what you had in mind so that might not work. but if it did, then he could like sneak away when he's working so he could see
[Anonymous]
her, which could cause big trouble if he gets caught *hint hint wink wink* later daze!!

***SABE***
[Anonymous]
i think part of sabe's advice makes sense. it would make sense for marianasjf to be moved to a different cell and ofcourse that would make dryan want to see her more so he would want to sneak off, but i think he would be too wary to do it during the working hours. maybe if he like...swiped the keys discreetly and during the night...in the dark...when no one could see him...make sense? have him have patience. like..take the key or something and ->
wait a few days for when it would be les conspicuous. because everyone would be watching for it after a few days they may assume they just misplaced or lost the key. then he sneaks out without being caught and boom you have...well...alot more open to you, thats for sure. you've been developing his character as headstrong but logical...if you go against that now it wouldnt make sense and would most likely ruin the story. just my opinion...laterer
I really hope that Jess was one of the many Jessica's in the world. ^.^ If it was my story, which it isn't, I would have Marianna sent far far away and then Dyran be all alone, again. Normally I would suggest killing someone off but no one likes that idea. Okay, maybe I was not the person to ask for ideas. Or you could possibly have Dyran knock the guys out and then make a gutsy escape with Marianna? They can be in love together. Yay!
-Armand
What everyone said below me would be the smart thing to go with, in fact, I advise that you take their ideas. ^_^
-Armand