Dyran's Misfortune: Chapter 4

Feeling: sane
Any errors let me know and I'll try and fix them. ~~~~~~~ Dyran stumbled backwards, his back hitting the railing of the stairs. Jack walked out, grabbed Dyran’s shoulder and shoved him down the hallway. Dyran stumbled down the hallways towards Xavier’s room. Dyran walked slowly, not wanting to reach Xavier’s room for he feared what they might do to him. Jack pushed Dyran towards the stairs as Jay, opened Xavier’s door and walked in. Hearing the door creak Dyran tried to turn around and look, but Jack was in his way. “Move, Kid.” “I told you, my names not kid.” Jack then shoved him, making him stumbling back a few steps. Tripping on the last step he fell to his bum on the landing between stairs. Jack stepped forward, reaching down and pulling Dyran up by his tank top. “Why don’t you walk and not make this hard on yourself?” Dyran glared at him, his face inches from Jack’s. “Bite me.” Jack then threw him back at the landing. Hitting the floor, Dyran quickly got to his hands and knees, climbed to his feet and raced down the stairs. Jack took off after him, chasing him down the stairs back behind the stairs and into the kitchen. Dyran was stuck at the door that led from the kitchen to the other hallway to the stairs. “I told Xavier to fix this!” he exclaimed as he tried to turn the handle. “Damnit.” Dyran ran from the kitchen, into the living room, only to be thrown to the floor by Jack as he grabbed him, and then shoved him to the floor. Dyran whined as he hit the ground, slightly catching himself with his bound hands. Becoming weak, he fell to his stomach and breathed heavily. Jack walked towards him, reached down, grabbed Dyran’s short, blonde hair, and pulling him up. Dyran grabbed Jack’s hands as he climbed to his feet, Jack leading him back towards the stairs. “Hurry up, Jay,” he called quietly. Hearing a gunshot, Dyran turned, looking up the stairs at Xavier’s room. “No,” he whispered. Jack then jerked Dyran’s head back, by his hair, “What was that?” Dyran glared at him, but didn’t respond. “I thought so.” He then released Dyran, hitting the floor with a thud. “Jay, let’s pack up and go.” “Right,” replied Jay as he walked down the stairs and handed the gun to Jack. “What are you going to do with me, now?” Dyran asked as he glared up at Jack. “You? What am I going to do with you?” Jack thought a moment. “That is a problem isn’t it, Shadow.” “Very troublesome,” Shadow replied. “How about a slave?” called Jay from the other room. ~~~~~~ Authors Note: If you don't seem to understand something, then tell me. Poor kid just can't seem to stay out of trouble can he, but I wonder what happens next?!?! And thanks to Jess, Sabe, Trisha, and Chris for reading my story and helping me continue to write more. Read and Review = more of the story but no pushing me.
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WHAT HAPPENS NEXT? IS HE GONNA BE OKAY? DOES XAVIER RESCUE HIM? MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*grin*

Sabe Babe
Sounds good :D Give me a post when it's finished. The story is interesting.

Thanx :)
Yeah I liked chapter 4 :) When you make a new chapter update me plz :P

Thanx!
thanks for the comment. ^^
WOW *__* your diary is awesome...(FFVII rocks).. did you draw that Red VIII above your entries?

anyways, nice job with the layout. ^^
[Anonymous]
tnx for your comments. I hope things work out, in the mean time i am not going to hang around and think over her all the time. thats no good. Anyway... I liked your story :)
: - ) Your story is great, love! I love the name you have chosen for the character, Dyran. It is so pretty! And of course you can be friend! I love having new friends! *hugs*

Jenner
[Anonymous]
I did not mean to rush you, as I think I did at one time or another! Really, take your time on writing and posting, I truthfully did not mean to do such, please forgive me. -bows- I luff how you care for me, I will be sure to eat a brownie tonight before I depart in an attempt to sleep. I luff you, dear! I wish you the best, forever and always.
-Armand
hmm.. that's a good question. i don't know what's with the finger. too much hate maybe? i dunno. and i was in so much pain i just wanted to cuss out a word. sorry :(

nice story!!! i'll be reading!
KEEP WRITING! ^_^ And I have a new chappie up!
Yeah, it is hard to deal with and I cannot blame your friend from crying. I guess everyone just has different coping mechanisms to get over the whole thing and mine would be to not have everyone say "I'm sorry" when they did not know Aimee. That was the only reason I asked that, not to sympathize over me. So do not think I was directing that to you about what I said above. -sigh- I await more on Dyran's poor misfortunes.
-Armand
Hah! I do wear black each and every day, with the exception of red and black. But all the more black is basically the only color in my wardrobe and if you do not mind me asking why are you not allowed to wear such colors all the time? The state and their ways of education need to just all burn alive for making us take such tests and believe that testing will make us become smarter! Stupid blighters. Have a great day my dear!
-Armand
AHHH! I just read all of your story, it was FANTASTIC! So so.. -sigh- I wish I could write like ye. Poor little kid who has been through so much. No, that was just awesome. Hah, yes all the gay ones are sexy. Well, not all but many are. I luff Davey, I mean yeah he looks good but Jade[Your man] and him are just unfrickin believable in Davey writing and your man playing. ~.^ You have gained a new reader, fwiend!
-Armand
i really like the story..and i'm just sitting here in suspense..so hurry and get to typin'!

laterdays...

_marie-o_
hey thanks for the comment :D yours looks cool too! :)

-ruby-
a lot of promise. good luck on it. (by the way since this will be on top scroll down and read from there up lol so it makes sense.) good luck and i'll keep reading. :D

laterer
LiLBiT
4- i saw a few errors here and there grammatically but i cant remember where they were exactly...if you read back over the story you should find them tho. another thing (5) lol - is with the judge it wouldnt have ended so simply there would have been paperwork. if you want a nonfictionalized effect try and work in xavier signing the temporary gaurdian papers. overall, its a really good story. great descriptions and really great lines. its got ->
One day, when I am not lazy I will read your story from the beginning. I am not mad at you saying such things, Kali. For I believe Jade[The blonde-hair one] is gay and Davey[Black-hair] is not as Jade said he was not on the message boards more times than once. I would luff for them to be gay though, be just awesome. I only get mad when AFI "fans" say that Davey is so "hott." That is mucho irksome. That angers Jess mucho in AFI aspects.
-Armand
have stopped it. its the way you formed his character. its how he is. he would have forced kyle to stop because its obvious he cares about the kid. and the fact that they're in a police station doesnt help the fact that it goes on that long. 3- how old is dryan? because the way he hides behind xavier makes it seem like he's younger than what he probably is. its a great idea for him to use xavier as a strong point but not so excessively ya know?->
well, im a writer and i've written about 4 novels already im in the middle of my fifth one now and i must admit i like your style...i've read all four chapters and i have a couple comments to make. one it was a little too obvious in the beginning that he was being abused. readers find it more interesting when they have to guess at things (just incase ya wanna promote this story- haha) 2- when kyle is threatening and beating dryan, xavier would ->
*cries* not a slave! Hasn't the boy been through enough?! XAVIER! SAVE HIM NOW!
Sango
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