some one comment on these...the people i sent them to don't actually read them, so read them and make me feel stupid, honestly. comment and critique me, it'll be the only way i get better I can feel the pressure The dread, the confusion But it makes no sense to me. I feel it, but I do not understand How, why, every time Not even an attempt. Closer and closer Then a quick retreat and surrender. Suicide In the thoughts of my leader. I cannot retreat I cannot surrender I must run so this never reaches my heart. I must run. (I don't expect you to understand this 2nd one, but stil lread it) This disaster Phantasmal beats Never…noticed Ringing cymbals Chanting harmony Is this symbolic Or is this what we’ve been Told to see Forever But nevermore An easy part Does it exist? No problems? I walk down the hall And hear One. Two Three. Four. Five. Six. Seven. Eight. (Skip.) Ten. I see the cold. Taking over. The cold black. It’s not named But it’s known. You can see it. I know It. My cold, black. Heart. It’s here for all to see. Nefarious. Nefarious. Nefarious. Single-serving, but cold And black and nefarious. Right here for all to See.