A Song

some1 wanted me to post up the song that i wrote that i wuz talking about earlier. i warn u its not reeli all that good n its not quite finished but here's the lyrics- Quarter of an inch away from the line of determination Quarter of my life away to show my desolation -Losing hope, lost in fear -Somber eyes, bloodred tear Facing the darkened day My tears like rain, its rain like tears Wating this time away While given that suggestive leer Tripped over the line of my determination Slipped over the line of trial and error -Lost hope, bound fear -When theres no one to call... Drowning in a selfish sorrow Tears like rain, wash away [the morning gloom] Do you have an unbroken heart to borrow? A lost soul, whose gone astray Tripped over the line of my determination Slipped oer the line of trial and error -Lost hope, bound fear -When theres no one to call... ~Thats all i've got so far. got ne suggestions on making it better and what to add?- just put up some comments n ill revise it n mayb post up the revised version.
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i think it's really really good. :)
"Tears like rain, wash away [the morning gloom]
Do you have an unbroken heart to borrow?" i really like it actually, a lot. have you ever been really sad about something, whatever it may be, kind of too much to cry, and then you look outside and it starts to rain? for some reason it reminded me of that.
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who is he?
oh ok, i've heard of the band but never heard their songs
thank ya so much.. u make me happy :-) lol
[Anonymous]
alright cool i'll dl them
heyy..how did u get ur thing on the top of the internet thing to scroll like that...or however u say it...? its soo cool

~renee~
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