#07

Listening to: Seether-Cigarettez
Feeling: asleep
i silently ponder existence wondering why it is im here is it to fulfill my own persistence of that ever going fear watching the time tick away for hourz sitting lonely in my room wishing for the comfort of a rain shower and that soft feeling of doom but dayz seem to stand still and the world does not revolve but time will not fulfill what centuries take to evolve and the human mind wastez away like erosions of the stone or the end of a string that has been frayed because it wasnt left alone but the time i took simply wasn’t enough to ease my starving mind and the times i waste were ever so rough after i had run out of time from my own sorted point of view i was left cold and alone my perception sent aske as i searched for piece of mind for my own and time was fair but still unjust to the demons inside my heart as i felt my mind corrode and rust i knew it would fall apart so i wait with patience for the day its going to go over the nest and over the fence to get lost in the snow coment on wht u think thnxxx
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its nice i like itx3
[Anonymous]
this one is really good to but it might need a little work it gets confussing like it doesn't hold attention
your poems are pretty good
I absolutely love how you incorporated the simpler elements of life, the things that we'd otherwise see as unimportant. String, snow, rain and stones - you take them all and force the reader to see how important they are in relation to how you feel.
Bravo.