#19

by tomorrowstrish
Feeling: old
Sitting here sadly in a corner Knees drawn up to my chest Mind and body wrecked in sorrow As tears course down my face I pray to a God i firmly believe in As I curse him in the same breath I look at ME with wondering eyes Pitying the sorrowful person ive become I look deep into my wretched soul Cursing the sheer emptiness inside Emptiness put their by my stupidity As I stand over the huddling form of me I have gotten what I deserve from life I had no right to the wonderful love we had I could should have fought her for you Now I see the shell of me slowly cracking Oozing with pain and misery within my soul High above all the broken pieces Lays my pulsating heart as it lies alone. I wish I could pick it up and mend it Why am I sitting in this bleak corner? Why am I alone and sorrowful How do I start to leave this hurt behind Is there another place my heary belongs? coment plzz
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WoW, that is a very deep poem, u have a lot of interesting feelings, itz so kewl how u can put them down on words and, like, wow. Very gloomy tho... good n e way!
Without a doubt, you've learnt how to paint a picture for your reader. It goes a long way and they appreciate it -trust me. As bad as this may sound, it seems like you're developing quite nicely.
you have to put it a code its
your text goes here

take out the spaces

-+-Lauren-+-
were you trying to spell afraid? if you were, what are you talking about?
[Anonymous]
god isnt real so you need to stop whining you emo faggot
[Anonymous]
I'm B...O...R...E...D out my skull
no no u have to put it where you want ur title of your entry to go and take out the spaces b4 marquee then it should work and no ur not bothering me i dont mind at all helpin it took me a while to get it too
wow
WoW, that is a very deep poem, u have a lot of interesting feelings, itz so kewl how u can put them down on words and, like, wow. Very gloomy tho... good n e way!
hey
thats a reallly goood poem
it make sa lot of sense too.
I like it!! a lot! i wish i could write like that!

~*kisses*~
go to www.soup-faerie.com and click cursors
then pick out a cursor and when you find the one you like copy the code in the box next to the cursor
and then paste it in the header info box when you go to preferences

comment back when you get it or if you need help

-+-Lauren-+-
no it doesn't have to be a link... just words :)
its good, actually its really good but it could be better if you didnt repeat events all the time and maybe if you added some background without letting people know to much. like for example you can add the girl more in the beginning so that the end shows alot of how you truly feel. other than that i really liked it. comment me if anything. =)
Love the SD by the way. I know exactly how you feel in reguards to the misspellings^^.
too sad and gloomy
[Anonymous]
I likey, but there are some spelling errors. If that doesn't phase you, then Very good none-the-less. keep up the good work.
hey chicka can ya check out a few of the other poems on my diary? thanks babe