Pathetic am I?

Feeling: melancholy
Creepy-assness of doom. I wrote... frikkin' ... Love poems about a guy I've barely ever met. The first one's shit and the second one doesn't flow well but sounds relatively ok as a song. So I'll lie here Listening to Story Of The Year And eating Sugar in the Raw While I think of you Seventeen sugar packets Down to four From all those times When I'd think of you So sweet These gifts that cheer me up To match with your intention And lying here In relative dark In relative solitude I know That you are my favorite boy. ------------------------------- as I said it's a giant pile of steaming shit ------------------------------- In darkness, I lie here Listening to Story of the Year I think of you kissing me Like you did At the Death Cab show And I remember How we both missed the Presidents Because you had to go And I didn't want to stay alone So I met up with a friend You could tell It was an end To my innocence The first time I hung out with druggies Moshing (all drunk) to Against Me As I sat there Watching their junk And wishing I was kissing you And I pictured Us lying together and talking And listening to happy music And joking around As we played in the sun By ourselves But I remembered It was all a dream I had to wake up And you didn't care about me And really, I'm just another girl In your big huge world So why would you want me? But I felt something there In that moment you kissed me It filled all the air In my lungs Right then, I dismissed it Thinking I must be crazy And I almost missed it But I felt it Just a little And more as time goes on You're the biggest crush I've ever had And I hope that you don't mind If I don't want just yet to move on And my point is It took all of these words to express it But I'm feeling it deep down inside me And I just got the guts to admit it I want just to get you alone I want just to get you alone I want just to get you... --------------------------------- Meh... that one's kind of ok sung because I can make the rhyme work out and sound kind of cool and unique-ish... But it has no proper from for a song... Well anyway, that's all I really wanted to post. Comment if you care, or if you don't care, or if you think I should eat shit and die. And don't just say "nice top left pic" or some stupid shit like that. If you're going to be here, read the fucking entry.
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I actually like that poem and that song. The style is interesting and unique...I really like it.
i really like both of them. who gives a shit about "form". im a professional singer and i write songs and poems on the side.. i think where you dont rhyme and stuff is called free verse? there awesome.

keep it up.

jac~
poopie

i like first but the 2nd isn't poop

u should tell me cause i'm being here

"heh heh thats a really cool side icon thingy"
[Anonymous]
i like em,Billy
[Anonymous]
so why dont you write? because we dont "read" we do read babe at least i do keep my informed if your okay or not,Billy
[Anonymous]
that second one i like it alot you dont have to move on when your in love,love is the best and worst thing in this world,Billy
[Anonymous]
i loved both of them really
theyre great
and beautiful
you're amazing <3
[Anonymous]