We Have no Control

I wrote this poem its not all that good but please comment on it and let me know what needs to be fixed... Thanks Love Janis. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This land has died million times before I was born I searched high ad low for a seeker that will help me find my path Through the deepest woods I walked Through the deepest seas I crossed Throughout my mind I thought of of life it self Don’t you see where all alone in this world the cities have been lost bombs have been set The animals have crawled under the deepest of this earth And we all die like before peace will come when the horns of heaven will blow But for now the fork stands tall and you are small Evil will flourish this earth like it did before we have no control we have no control we have no control we have no control
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even the smallest person can change the course of the future. sry...eh hem. death...hmmm...i am a believer in reincarnation and death is only to the body and not that of the soul. the bombs may destroy the land and the blood may be spilt, but in the end, the souls live on! later.
trees are part of the land, not the land itself. (please don't be angry with me for debating b/c that's who i am and a lot of people get short with me when all i intended to have was an intelligent conversation)
k, that's cool then. nice poem though.
i read it to german and he said it was scary.....'
peace and take care
gladys
I love that. but if humans die we will survive. hehe.