new poem (at last)

Finally, a new poem!! Buuuuut, i'm lost for a title. Any ideas would be greatly apreciated. All critisism will be welcomed, too. And so, here is the poem i wrote last night, at midnight, when i couldn't sleep: Unnamed I want you I need you I lay in restless wait For the time you come to realise My love knows no bounds. As time goes by, I wait For the few precious moments, Where we are alone, That, in waiting, makes you mine. My gaze falls to the clocks Our time together draws to an end And the forever question that comes too. hot to end the perfect night, and return to the darkness? With a hug, a kind word, and a goodbye? Or with a lone kiss that says it all: "I love you"? I leave with a goodbye, without the courage to show how i feel But as time draws on The lonely regret builds And the promise that next time, i will prove my love Forever lingering in the empty air. But the time never comes And I keep it hidden another day Forever promising Tomorrow. But as the times roll on The forever promise of Tomorrow Is never satisfied. The times change And as we age we are drawn apart Fate brings us together again But the forever promise is never satisfied. Long years pass And as you die A tear is shed Many years have passed And contact was long ago broken But the love always remained. Time changed our paths, Forgetting our past And the final meeting Held in store A brief hug, and a quick goodbye. Time passes once more Bringing regret, And death, at my own hands. The forever promise, To be broken, in the afterlife.
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i'm at school now. how are you on aim at 12 anyway?
Aw, this poem really makes you think. It's a sad ending but you can tell everything was thought out. Really impressed with the poem.
[Anonymous]
Someone needs to publish this!
[Anonymous]
wow gr8 poem its so cool
[Anonymous]
yer its reali gd...reali meaningful
[Anonymous]
yea, its really good!
[Anonymous]
wow that was a really moving poem i was really impressed!!! :)
[Anonymous]
i'm here now. school is hectic.

call the peom "time"... that's all i could think of
[Anonymous]
the anonymous comment was me. i hadn't signed in.
how old are you?
hug. im not gtrounded ne more. so yay lol .
i like your poem
[Anonymous]
ya i left my last comment annonomus cuz im an iudiot and click the rong button. but uh ya .i havent chatted with u in a while. how bout good bye as the title of the poem . it just seems fitting idk
funky.
u could IM me on omglookawall
or
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