Listening to: weezer-bev. hillz
Feeling: accepted
it waz all you
how you took my life
and all i an do is ask why
all you wanted was my body
it was just your little toy
you knew i was too scared of you
you called me a stupid little gurl
you pushed me around
made me become your slave
i wanted to tell mommy
but you said only i was to blame
i will alwayz remember
the first time it happen
everybody that heard
just kept dancing
you slapped my face
and tied me to the bed
you said it was just a lil kinky
then why did i wish i was dead
after it waz over you drove me away
you took me to the ocean
you said it was are special place
and as i sat there in the sand
i knew it waz all part of your plan
i knew i wouldnt run
we stayed there till we saw the sun
that waznt the last time
it has happen many more
and everytime
i feel like your stupid little pawn
now i am here all alone
called a slut for wht i have done
no one to love me
and all you do is just make fun
my body is now lost
forever in tht sea
the one you took me to
after everytime you had me bleed.
coment plzz
PLEASE!
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good job.
i like it.
2) http://www.eliteskills.com (where I write my poems, you might like it).
Three) Keep it up. Your poem is good but you MAY want to try writing with correct grammar and spelling of words to make people appreciate you more. This is an adult poem with adult feelings....make it look adult.
Overall kick-arse job!
--Kayla
thats reeeeally good!!♥♥?
♥ Valerie
thats rrrrrrrrlllllllly good
&hearts valerie
vaberz22♥