Listening to: Green Day-Boulevard of broken dreamz
Feeling: broken
My life is over,
This is it
The peices just
dont seem to fit
Ive lost my mind
Its gone away
So why do i
Have to stay
It hurts so much
To be alive
Im out of touch
i cant survive
Its getting cold
The end is near
So why dont i
feel any fear
You walked away
you wouldent stay
You just left me here,
Alone in fear
But i dident cry
i just want to die
This is it
The end id here
You didnt care
You werent there
When i needed you
To help me through
Now its to late
Youve missed the date
Its over now
Why you say
Because you ran away
How you ask
Well it was a pretty easy task
i cut the skin
And watched the blood
As it dripped away
It felt so good
i couldnt stop
And you dident help
You didnet see
i needed you
To stay with me
If you had cared
And had been there
i would be with you
because i felt the love too
Now its over
i am gone
No longer alive
because i couldent survive
And now you are
The one alone
i am gone
That was it
Now those peices
just might fit...
coment plzz
keep writing. i'd like to read more.
<3 jordan
ROCK ON!!
lara
I read all of your poems, commented on the ones where I felt I wouldn't be intruding... or at least where it wasn't too personal. I'm able to mostly see where you're coming from with your poems, and for the most part it seem natural enough. You're at an impasse, so to speak. I'm not going to psycho-analyze you or anything, but if you ever want to talk about things (anything other than your poems & you know what I mean) let me know.
Truly,
what i like about it is the choppiness and its kind of surprising but interesting. where i cant tell if i do or dont like it so it kind of makes it exciting.
of course im not 100 percent right now so excuse me if thats rude
later
It's still an excellent poem...
[ilovetheleafs]