#21

Feeling: broken
My life is over, This is it The peices just dont seem to fit Ive lost my mind Its gone away So why do i Have to stay It hurts so much To be alive Im out of touch i cant survive Its getting cold The end is near So why dont i feel any fear You walked away you wouldent stay You just left me here, Alone in fear But i dident cry i just want to die This is it The end id here You didnt care You werent there When i needed you To help me through Now its to late Youve missed the date Its over now Why you say Because you ran away How you ask Well it was a pretty easy task i cut the skin And watched the blood As it dripped away It felt so good i couldnt stop And you dident help You didnet see i needed you To stay with me If you had cared And had been there i would be with you because i felt the love too Now its over i am gone No longer alive because i couldent survive And now you are The one alone i am gone That was it Now those peices just might fit... coment plzz
Read 14 comments
good poem and np about ur other entry... Hell I have a hangover so I'm alittle messed up too
dont you think theyre a bit morbid
[Anonymous]
hey. i love you poetry. very meaningful. it's amazing.
keep writing. i'd like to read more.
<3 jordan
[Anonymous]
schweet.
hey nice poems ttyl
[Anonymous]
I like your header saying.....thats form the Killers.....I really like that band.
ROCK ON!!
No, no... I like your writing, it was no problem at all. :)
[Anonymous]
holy shit fuck if you write those there fucking awesome i love this one do you mind if i take it and use it in a scrap book page of mine becuz it reminds me of me and my ex b/f jacob
lara
Hi,
I read all of your poems, commented on the ones where I felt I wouldn't be intruding... or at least where it wasn't too personal. I'm able to mostly see where you're coming from with your poems, and for the most part it seem natural enough. You're at an impasse, so to speak. I'm not going to psycho-analyze you or anything, but if you ever want to talk about things (anything other than your poems & you know what I mean) let me know.
Truly,
hey the first half is really good but the second parts just too much.

what i like about it is the choppiness and its kind of surprising but interesting. where i cant tell if i do or dont like it so it kind of makes it exciting.

of course im not 100 percent right now so excuse me if thats rude
[Anonymous]
Wow thats like so flippin awsome u should like make lyrics and send tthem into a store for money......

later
Your poetry is corny, try not to rhyme.
I dunno... maybe if you take a real good look at it you could improve upon it...
It's still an excellent poem...
cool, i like it.
[ilovetheleafs]
[Anonymous]