#21

by tomorrowstrish
Feeling: bitter
The shadows on my arms display the hate i use to feel for my self.. the shadows on my arm show the love ive felt for others and couldnt express the shadows on my arm are there because something in my mind cant quite connect the shadows on my arm remind me that life is real even when i dont feel it ... coment plzz yes i know its short :/ i just thought of it and i wrote it down...
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i was actually expecting them to suck, but they are pretty good. some of them.
Hey there,
I read all of them, and I like them. But, the noe I like the most is #20. You painted a better picture in that one. When you write you should aim to paint strong and meaningful "pictures." Don't be afraid to experiment with writing. You can even come up with your own structure. For example, The water
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Etc.. Your peoms are great though. :) Keep it up
[Anonymous]
It may be short, but it is still good, I like it




Your all beautiful
[bob]
nice.. you should read mine.. if i had em up..:plol my gpa just died last night so ill probally end up writing sum more.
[Anonymous]
its the best of you... lol pointing that out
It was only a kiss, it was only a kiss:)
Charles
raw, unabridged... but more important, it means something. And perhaps, perhaps the best part is the fact that you've taken something away from it, that it wasn't in vain and that you've grown because of the experience.
Short, to the point, no nonsense and you didn't try to pretty up the realit because it isn't pretty. We're not talking about love here so it's appropriate.
I like it.
Content is much more important than length... in this case the content is very good... great poem