#14

by tomorrowstrish
Feeling: abnormal
I beg you good people Please dont get me wrong I am a broken hearted girl Who trys to fit where she doesnt belong Since the day I was cast into the world I have had to fight just to stay alive People always teased me Told me I was a mistake but to me that is no surprise I can still hear the hurtful words Spoken by those I thought really cared Scars so deep inside me Nothing else can ever compare I have cried rivers of tears I have bled for pain that was not suppose to be mine The sting of the belt on my back Shall forever be fresh in my mind I am a broken warrior On a journey filled with hate and pain I fight to live through each day I pray for one more day of which I will stay sane But the anger builds up Like the flood of an oncoming storm When it is released to the world A new monster is alwayz born I have thoughts of death Many times I just want to kill I only have a mother But with her I have no will My mind is so scattered Like dust covering up bones My body is broken down I can not even sit on my tattered leather throne Please understand where I come from I know I am not alone There are so many of you out there Who are like me a cast out stone If you read this Please heed my words of advice Do not give into tempetation Do not give into the sharpness of the knife Conquer the grief And battle the pain, Show those who did not believe Your life is yours you have everything to gain Stand up proud Show who you truly are Tell those who put you down That every day here on out you will be the one going far Remember words are more powerful Actions are stronger then any promise you can make Live each day to the fullest Because you are someone whos spirit will never break this took me 3 dayz i just finnished it ..coment plzz
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lilkrazierikan06, but I g2g soon
wut can i help you with
(take out the spaces or theywon't work) the title then lol there ya go :-D
that was a great poem, i know it must have said alot to alot of other people thank you
[Anonymous]
what do you need? i'll help if i can.
erm...
i dont know...
i hate the "feel-sorry-for-me-i-wanna-kill-myself-im-all-alone-in-the-world-no-one-understands-me" poems. its repetive and doesnt capture me at all. I didnt even bother to finish reading it. kind of whiney.
but meh, keep writing. ill keep up with ur work.
incredibly malcontent teen. with the ability to spell, but denies it. plzzz!!1
[Anonymous]
of course u can...i already added u...lol
Yeah I can help you with something, what is it?
How to what? Make what fuzzy? or wai, you said blurry I think..
wow that was verydeep. And i am truly sorry for your pain. I feel it and i wish that pain on no one. I pray for your happiness and if you ever.. ever need some1 to talk to i'm here..i may be a stranger but i'd never want u to be hurting
thats awsome
aww its reaLly good !! it makes me think of any time ppl hav been mean to me nd makes me feel evn worse to any1 i had been mean to ..

<3
hey your poems are great! by the way my name is jessika. aiight.. bye
[Anonymous]
wow that was amazing. i really liked it and i want you to know that from what it sounds, i am going through/went through the same thing.
[Anonymous]
hey trish its kayla where did you get my name? well gtg ttyl love ya!kaykay
I LOVE IT!!!! its a great poem..it may describe how you feel..but it also describes how many others feel......like me....
Not many people who've gone through what you've been through take enough time to warn, guide or otherwise help kids who're in the same position that they were in not too long ago. So for purpose and intent, I commend you. Just watch your focus; you may be saying more than you mean to in one poem.
wow. I love your poems. They're so..deep.

I was just wondering..can you help me with a code in my diary. I have a code to make things blur..but i dont know where to put it.


Thanks,

-Kristy

haha. your fan :p
your wellcome
and keep writing i really like them

-+-Lauren-+-
sounds good... :-)
That is very cool. I like the rythm. The beat is strong enough that you could turn it into a song. Have you thought about checking around to see if you could enter any local poetry contests? It might benefit you.
Cheers,
Scarlett
That's very admirable. You should consider it. Speaking as someone who's been asked to have her stuff published since age 8, I think you're doing well. Just keep pushing the envelope.
Cheers,
Scarlett
woah. those 3 days were worth it. i haven't read many pieces of art that are that intense. it flowed together without any flaws. & that is something that not many young poets can do. you're very talented. keep up the good work.
peace & love_ Jamie
hey your poems rock and i think my friends would love to read them like
jessicau and nightshade1226 and i was wondering will you be my friend?
youve already written me 2 comments telling me to read your poetry so obviously you arent reading what i write about. why would i care to read your diary when you dont even bother to read mine. youre just fishing for compliments. but theyre going to be compliments that dont mean anything.

peace and love

Nikki
[Anonymous]
lol i will
I read this one; I really like it! You're a great writer! Keep on truckin! lol

Bandgeek4life
[Anonymous]
ah forget whatever i said before im really stoned

[addiction]
[Anonymous]
DAMN that is liek frickn GOOD! i have a lyrical diary too, i'll add you to you to friends and you can add me too.
i love your poems there really deep and good
i love your poems there really deep and good
those are cute!
[Anonymous]
kind of emo.
and cliche.

just like everyone elses.
[Anonymous]
youre trying to hard using words and phrases that just arent used anymore.
[Anonymous]
i dont know how to do the cursor thing or i would help you!

[Anonymous]
Its not very good in the sense that its pretty plain. But it is good in the sense that your writting, and your expressing yourself. Getting out all those feelings you have and putting them done on paper, or typing them. So while as a person who writes myself I'll have to say its pretty bland and basic. But what I say shouldn't matter to you, and I do applaud anyone who expresses themself through poetry. I hope that was n't too harsh.
wow you're a really good writter and i love your poems. i can totally realate to them. that's cool. anyways, write on.