#11

by tomorrowstrish
Feeling: bored
i saw the future me and thtz wht i want to be no matter wht you say tht will be me someday... dressed in all blac never going bac thiz iz me cant you see ? im never going to be the same... ill never go by tht name i love being thiz way... and im not missed alone in the shadowz... lookin out the windowz... coment plzz
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hey i will ad you to my list
my s/n is SwillyDuckling11

Asums
[Anonymous]
Independence, awakening and setting your own path. Just becareful that in doing so, you don't wind up caging yourself up in a corner hun. I can't speak on the entire situation, but remember that being yourself is perhaps one of the most important things right now.
ur poems r really good i can tell ur a true artist
[Anonymous]
thats me in 5 years
[Anonymous]
Im not sure where this is leding I get it in a way but I think you should add to it !!
u make alota poems... ever thought of selling um for cash?
[Anonymous]
oh, ohkay lol
[Anonymous]
hey, i likee your poems. I give you props im not always good with expressing how i feel and you definitely pulled that off.
u're poems are good, diff. from what a lot of poems are like, it shows the dark side of life which is beautiful, i like em'.
[Anonymous]
your poems are very deep. and from somewhere very few understand. i like that in writing. very well done.
[Anonymous]
aw thats so good!! i read some of your other poems too... you deff. have talent! i'll read all your poems for now on! xoxo...
vickychicky21
[Anonymous]
lol
i like ur bam icon
w0w theyre really good i like them lotsz

-+-Lauren-+-
I have read a lot of great poems and to be honest, your's were quite bad. They seemed very amatuer.

-I am anonymous because I have no account.-
[Anonymous]
I'm sure someone would miss ya... no matter how linear your path seems, the future is yours and no one elses to do with which you please. Never forget who the master of your destiny is... You. Mix life accordingly, to be as happy as possible. Peace
oooooo good poem
i like it lol
I added you so sure why not. I can critque your poems when I have time.

-Roxie
[Anonymous]
hey i was jw if you had like Aol or an E-mail adress

Ashums
[Anonymous]
wait.. wut is my cursor?! lol.. it looks plain to me! haha
[Anonymous]
I love you because you love Bam and he is great. Anyway, okay your poem is fantastic except the way you ghettofied it by adding all the z's in place of s's. It's just a suggestion that you can ignore but I think you should change them back to s's. It takes seriousness out of the poem. Well that was my honest opinion, keep writing!

-Roxie
[Anonymous]
your poems are awsome i wish i could make poems like you do

lol
[Anonymous]
cool diary.. i love bam!:)
[Anonymous]
There really good its just you need to spell the words right inorder for it to be a good poem. But That is just my advice. Teresa
i like your poems.. your a great writer keep it up and i will comment on all of them
timsbbygrl4e
[Anonymous]
ur poems are an expression of self so i guess they cant be all that bad. however they arent very deep and they are very straight forward. they dont make you think and your grammar is that of a 1st grader. if you really want to be good then you'll have to look deeper and write what you really feel. maybe start with a haiku?

i dont know. i was just being honest. good luck in the future.
[Anonymous]
lovely, i realy like it :P foreverinsane :P
[Anonymous]
your poems are kool and bam is hott love your diary plzz coment back much ~brenna~
[Anonymous]
I liked it, but do you have something against Ks? Because you skipped a lot of them. And you replaced a lot of your Ss with Zs. That can be a poet's downfall. You have good material, just try to keep spelling in mind.